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Chapter 12: Rival Encounter! Part 1: The True Blue Blurs VS. The Bad Reputations
The Next Day, Our Heroes Were at Their Meeting Place to locate the next 2 emeralds.
Sonic: So Tails, Marine. What's The Status on the Next Emerald?
Tails: According Both the Miles Electronic
Marine: And Marine Electronic.
Tails: The Next Chaos Emerald is located at A City Called Manehattan.
Rainbow Dash: Hey, Me & Sonic went there as a course for our race!
Sonic: It should be no problem finding it there!
Marine: & The Next Sol Emerald will be at another city called Thottingham!
Spike: Say Twilight, Didn't someone you know come from Throttingham before?
Twilight: Come to think of it, yeah. Trixie Lulamoon!
Knuckles: Who?
Applejack: She's a Magician that came to Ponyville one time & caused a lot of trouble to her boasting attitude.
Knuckles: Geez, Reminds me of you know who!
Knuckles was Referring this To Sonic & Dashie. Soon everyone started to stare at them.
Sonic & Rainbow Dash: What?
Twilight: We'll discuss about Trixie later. Right Now, we got to find those Emeralds!
All: Right!
So, as usual, Team Guardians stayed behind while Team Chaos & Team Sol headed to their destinations to find the emeralds.
(Music: Empire City –Day-Sonic Unleashed)
Team Chaos Finally made it to The Big city, Manehattan Where the Next Chaos Emerald will be.
Tails: Okay Guys, The Next Chaos Emerald is just miles ahead. So we should get this done Right away.
Sonic: Sounds too easy.
Rainbow Dash: What if somepony takes it before us? And Uses it for their own personal needs?
Knuckles: Then we Better Hurry & get that emerald fast!
Applejack: We don't want the same thing that happens with that ChaosColt Fella again.
Team Chaos: Right!
As The Miles Electronic's Radar Beeped faster & changed color, Team Chaos Was One Step away from their goal. What they didn't know was that 2 Rivals from their Past is planning to settle the score with our 2 blue heroes from the shadows. Along with a robot spy that plans to get the emerald before they do.
Throttingham
(Music: Solenia New City-Sonic '06)
Team Sol Have arrived in Throttingham where they'll find the next Sol Emerald.
Marine: okay Fellas, According to the Marine Electronic the Next Sol Emerald should be-
Suddenly the Team heard a crowd of Ponyfolk cheering on for a light blue Unicorn performing Tricks With her Lighting Magic.
?: THANK YOU! THANK YOU! & NOW, THE GREAT & POWERFUL TRIXIE WILL PERFORM A FINAL PERFORMANCE WITH THIS MAJESTIC GEM I FOUND!
The Unicorn takes out a Light Blue Sol Emerald & performs a set a tricks with her unicorn magic & Sol energy from the emerald.
Marine: Hey, that's a-
Dr. Whooves: A SOL EMERALD!
Silver: but that Unicorn….
Blaze: is that The Trixie, You were talking about Twilight?
Twilight: yeah, & something's never Change…..
(Music Fades)
After The Show, Before Trixie Packed Her Stuff up & was ready to leave. She looked at the Sol Emerald one Last Time.
Trixie: Ever Since Trixie Found This Mysterious Powerful Gem. Trixie's Shows have more lively than Ever. Trixie Keeps This up & She Might are a Big Time Magician like She Wanted!
Twilight: Trixie Lulamoon!
Trixie Turned Around to Find Team Sol Behind her.
Trixie: Twilight Sparkle? It's been a While. I See You Made Some Friends.
Twilight: Trixie, Give Me That Emerald You Have There!
Blaze: It's Important that We Get it Right Away!
Trixie: Emerald? Oh You Mean This?
Trixie Takes Out The Sol Emerald She Used For her Show Today.
Trixie: This Emerald Made Trixie's Shows Magnificent! Trixie Can't Let You all take it from her.
Sliver: it's Important we get That Emerald back or Else Your World & Our World Will Be Doomed!
Dr. Whooves: Ms. Lulamoon, The Fate of All Dimensions Lies Deep Within All 7 of Those Emeralds. Please give it to us.
Trixie: No…Trixie Won't let you take This Emerald!
Suddenly The Emerald Started to Glow With Energy.
Trixie: TRIXIE WON'T ALLOW IT!
(Music:FU-U-GA-Guilty Gear XX2 OST)
As she yelled out those Words Trixie Fired a Lightning Bolt at The Team. Luckily, they dodged it & Separated at all Directions.
Marine: I guess, We Have to do this The Hard Way!
Twilight: You said it, Marine!
As everyone get themselves in their Fighting Positions. Team Sol Is Gonna Have Yet another Emerald Battle. This Time, it's With The Great & Powerful, Trixie Lulamoon
(With Team Chaos in Manehattan)
As Team Chaos Made to The Location of the Emerald, They Were Quite Surprised That It wasn't there.
Tails: That's Strange….
Sonic: What is it?
Tails: Usually There should be an Emerald in this Exact same Spot!
Applejack: But I ain't here Right?
Tails: Yeah! And you know what the weirdest Part is?
Rainbow Dash: What is it?
Tails: The Miles Electronic's Emerald Radar is Still Beeping Red on the Spot We're in….
Knuckles: But That Also Could Mean…
Sonic: Someone in this Area Found the Emerald Before We Did!
?: Looking for This?
(Music: Throw it All Away ~Shadow's Theme~- Sonic Adventure 2 (SA2Battle))
Team Chaos looked up a nearby Building to See 2 Figures: A Black Hedgehog with Red Markings, holding a Yellow Emerald. Assisting Him Is A White & Brown Griffin with Purple Markings on her Eyes.
?: Hey Dash, It's Been A While. I See You Made New Loser Friends.
Applejack: That Voice...
Tails: Sonic, Isn't that?
The 2 Figures Come down & Reveal themselves to Be Shadow the Hedgehog & Gilda Griffin
Sonic: It's Shadow!
Rainbow Dash: & Gilda!
Gilda: So, You Must be Sonic the Hedgehog.
Sonic: That's The Name, Speed's My Game!
Shadow: & From the Looks Of it, you must Be Rainbow Dash.
Rainbow Dash: The One & Only!
Tails: Shadow, what are you doing here?
Shadow: Isn't it obvious? I'm here For Sonic!
Gilda: Same with Dashie.
Both: We came to settle the score with you! Once & For All!
Sonic & RD Were Not Surprised as They Heard this Comment Before.
Rainbow Dash: Whatever….
Sonic: You guys are gonna Get Beat Again Anyway!
Shadow: Don't Get Too Cocky
Gilda: This Time! We'll win! 3 Laps Across the city. IF You Win, You get this Chaos Emerald Shadow Has in his Hand!
Shadow: Wait. What?!
Gilda: Well I Have Nothing Else to Bet on.
Rainbow Dash: and if We Lose?
Shadow: you have No Choice But to Admit we're The Fastest Duo Alive!
Gilda: & Surrender That Device, Your Rodent Friend's Got There!
As Gilda Insulted Tails. Sonic Was Frustrated
Sonic: Hey! Don't Talk to My Buddy like That!
Rainbow Dash: Still the Same as Ever Gilda. Fine! We'll take Your Challenge! You & Shadow Both!
As Dashie finished saying those words, The Racers Began their Starting Positions.
Gilda: I'm Looking Forwards to This!
Shadow: Same Here, Prepare To Taste Defeat, Sonic & Rainbow Dash!
Sonic & Rainbow Dash: AS IF!
Applejack: All Right Fellas…Ready….GO!
Soon The True Blue Blurs & The Bad Reputators Began Their Race Around Manehattan. The Battle has Just Begun!
(Music: For True Story (Circuit Freq Remix)-Sonic Generations)
Sonic & Dashie used Rainboom Boost picked up their Speed. As they do this, Shadow & Gilda did the same to catch up with them. The Race was Intense as They Ran on Skyscrapers, Ran on Busy Roads & Avoiding Pedestrians. On a Nearby Rail, Sonic & Shadow grinded on it & Increased their Speed with Dashie & Gilda Following them Side By Side.
Shadow: I have to admit, you've became Faster than the Last Time We Met!
Sonic: I could say the same for You, Shadow!
Rainbow Dash: I'll Admit Gilda. Your Speed Increased Since We Last Raced!
Gilda: Same Goes For you Dashie!
Sonic & Shadow got off the rail & continued their Race on the Highway. Gilda & Dashie Followed as they got off. So Far, Sonic & RD Past them & Got through The 1st lap. It was Lap 2; Shadow & Gilda were Now In front of them. Dashie thought this would be a chance to use Her & Sonic's Combo Move, The Rainboom Boost.
Rainbow Dash: Say Sonic? How About We Show These Posers our Combo Move!
Sonic: I Was Thinking the Same Thing!
Sonic & Dashie got a Bit Closer Together & Both a Blue Aura & Rainbow Aura Was surrounding them As They Accelerated by the Second.
Sonic & RD: RAINBOOM BOOST!
The Two Speeders Ran at Top Speed With The Rainboom Boost & Past Their Opponents. Shadow thought of another plan as Sonic & Dashie past Him & Gilda.
Shadow: Say Gilda, It Looks like we're Not the Only One's With Combo Moves!
Gilda: You're Right! Let's See If Those Two can handle this!
Soon a Red-Yellow Chaos Energy Emitted from Shadow & Winds Start to surround Gilda. The Two Got a Little Closer Like Sonic & RD Did. Soon, The 2 Boost Attacks Merged into A Red-Yellow Chaos Energy & Winds Surrounding Gilda & Shadow.
Gilda & Shadow: HERE'S OUR COMBO MOVE! CHAOS WIND BOOST!
Like Sonic & Dashie, Shadow & Gilda used Their Combo Move to catch up to them. The 2 Pair of Racers are now Neck-in-Neck.
Sonic: No Way!
Rainbow Dash: You guys have a combo Move too?
Gilda: You Bet!
Shadow: Since I was sent here by that Light. I've been training with someone with my same tastes like Gilda Here So When the time comes.
Gilda: We thought that if we see either you or Dashie. Well, we would take you guys down & What a Coincidence! We Were Lucky to find you both and it'll be Twice as Sweet to take on both you guys on at once!
Sonic: That is if you can catch up to us first!
Sonic & RD tried their Best to past them. Soon, Shadow & Gilda made their Boost attacks stronger & Past the 2 Speeders, Wining the 2nd lap.
Gilda: All right!
Shadow: Don't get cocky yet! We just need one more Lap to Win!
Gilda: Right!
The Rest of Team Chaos Watched as Both Pairs Won Both Laps
Knuckles: No way!
Tails: They're both Tied!
Applejack: Come on, Sonic & Dashie! This is The Last Lap! You need to win this so we can get That Emerald!
Rainbow: AJ's Right, Sonic! If we're gonna beat those two. We need to give it all we got!
Sonic: I couldn't agree with you more! We need to win this race for the Chaos Emerald! Let's Speed up!
Soon Sonic & RD Went Even Faster Than Before.
Shadow: Tch, Damn it! They're catching up to us Again!
Gilda: No matter! We'll just use Our Combo Move Again! That Way, the only thing those Losers will eat is our dust!
Shadow: Hmph, You got a point. Okay, Let's Go!
(Music: Time Eater ~Final Attack~-Sonic Generations)
Shadow & Gilda: CHAOS WIND BOOST!
Sonic & RD: RAINBOOM BOOST! MAX POWER!
Soon The 2 Pairs Activated their Boost Attacks! Going Neck To Neck, Clashing with Each other. As They Race, strong winds Blew on the Streets of the busy city. Son, There were 10 Miles away from the Finish Line.
Shadow: This is it!
Gilda: This Is Where It all ends!
RD: I Would Be So Sure!
Shadow & Gilda: huh?
Sonic: Hehe! You Guys Still have a lot of ways to go! Rainbow Dash!
Rainbow Dash: You got it!
Soon, Sonic & RD Were Faster Than Before. Soon, in 5 seconds Flat, Sonic & RD Boomed at the Speed of Sound, Blowing Gilda & Shadow Backward. The Half Rainbow-Half Blue Aura from the Rainboom Boost Transformed into a Mixture of both of the Auras & Zoomed Past The Finish Line like mini Ray. Sonic The Hedgehog & Rainbow Dash Went to a halt for .5 seconds as they finished the last lap & With 2 Wins. The True Blue Blurs Win the Race! Sonic & Rain bow Dash Were Exhausted from all the energy they put in this race.
Sonic: Whew, That Was Tight!
Rainbow Dash: You're Telling Me! What was That Move we just used now?
Sonic: I don't know. But whatever it is, it really saved our Butts out there.
Rainbow Dash: Yeah, If it weren't for that Move. Shadow & Gilda would have Won That Race & We Would get Tails' Miles Electronic to find all 7 Chaos Emeralds.
The Rest of Team Chaos Came Running to the Winners. Gilda & Shadow Finished the lap of soon as the team went to sonic & RD.
Tails: Sonic!
Applejack: Rainbow Dash!
Knuckles: You Guys, Okay?
Rainbow Dash: Yeah, We're all right!
Sonic: We gave it our All! Hey! Shadow! Gilda!
Shadow: What?
RD: I Believe You Owe Us Something!
Shadow: Tch! Don't Need to remind me.
Shadow Takes out the Yellow Chaos Emerald, Suddenly a Tiny Mechanical Hand Grabs it and Reels it to its bottom.
(Music: Boss ~Day~-Sonic Unleashed (Sonic World Adventure))
Shadow: Huh?
Gilda: What the Hell?
Knuckles: That Little Guy's got the Emerald!
The Tiny Robot starts to fly away.
RD: Hey! Get back here with that emerald!
Team Chaos, Shadow, & Gilda Chased down the Robot. 6 seconds later it flew away in the sky.
(Music Fades)
Sonic: Damn it!
Tails: it got away!
Knuckles: That must have been one of Eggman's Drones!
Gilda: Eggman?
Shadow: He's An Evil Genius Who plans To Take over the World & to Think I Worked with him Before (Ref. To Sonic Adventure 2)
AJ: Well At Least We still got 3 in our hand!
RD: AJ's Right! We Still Have the Upper hand
Tails: We Come on. Let's Head Back to Ponyville. I'm sure the others found the Sol Emerald Already.
Sonic & RD May Won the Battle between Shadow & Gilda. But, as it seems, One of Eggman's Drones caught the Chaos Emeralds Now the Chaos Emerald hunt for Team Chaos & Eggman is Down to 2 to 3. Meanwhile Team Sol Fights the Great & Powerful Trixie for the last Sol Emerald. Will Team Sol beat The Magician & Get the Sol Emerald? Or Will the Great & Powerful Trixie Lulamoon be Victorious? Find out Next Time on Sonic & Rainbow Dash Adventure!
This chapter was devoted to the team of Sonic & Rainbowdash meeting another team in which seemed to have their old Rival Teaming up with the others old Rival. Not a bad concept for any chapter, it seemed pretty cool. But how it was made was boring... They were following the initial plot, which is to collect the Chaos and Sol Emeralds. Sonic and Rainbowdash were challenged by the Rival Team to a race for a Chaos Emerald, okay then seems simple. There were conditions corresponding to with wins or Losses of each team.
Lets talk about the Stakes of the Race...
We've already established they are racing for the chaos Emerald, and at this point in the story is a very valuable prize for them, Sonic and Rainbowdash. The stakes of Shadows Team were Dangerously high, if they lose the race they have to surrender the chaos Emerald. I like it! The Stakes are high for their Team! However, the stakes for Sonics team were RIDICULOUSLY LOW!
Shadow: If you win, you get our Emerald... If you lose... You admit were faster than both of you! MWAHAHAHAHA!
That was beyond stupid and disappointing... That made it seem like there was no consequences for the loss of that race. In something that serious, there should always be equally dangerous stakes for both of them. Something that should make Sonic and Rainbowdash ask themselves "Should we take that Risk?" If i was writing the story, this is how i would have made it go down...
Shadow: ive got a little offer to make you two Sonic
Sonic: ...Im listening
Shadow: You guys wouldn't happen to want this would you? *Holds out Emerald*
Rainbowdash: A Chaos Emerald! Hand that over!
Sonic: Hold on Rainbowdash... What kind of offer did you have in mind?
Shadow: Does a race for this Emerald peak your interest?
Sonic: Competing for an Emerald at Something i do best? I almost feel Sorry for you guys already!
Gilda: Shadow, thats our only Emerald.
Shadow: This is my Emerald and i'll gamble however i want with it. Do you already think were gonna lose them?
Gilda: No But-
Sonic: Lets get this show on the road!
Gilda: What about if they lose Shadow? We cant just let them get of scott free if they lose
Shadow: I have conditions Gilda. If you win, the Emerald is yours.
Sonic: Whats in it for you guys?
Shadow: If we win, you give us one of your chaos Emeralds.
Rainbowdash: Sonic! We cant just go around playing with the Emeralds like they're poker chips!
Sonic: *Raises eyebrow* have any better sugguestions? What are we gonna tell the others? We found the last Emerald but were to afraid to try to get it because we didn't wanna lose ours?
Rainbowdash: We give em a beatdown and take it!
Sonic: listen, ive enjoyed fighting Shadow as much as the next guy, but i dont feel like getting mauled today, and i know you couldn't take him.
Rainbowdash: Okay! Okay! Okay! If we lose this thing, you are going to tell everyone, and you are going to take all of the heat for this.
Sonic: Fair enough. But that also means if we win, i take all of the credit for that too.
Rainbowdash: Im okay with not getting the spotlight, as long as it means i dont take any blame if we lose.
Sonic: Already giving up? You're Already starting to sound like her *nods head to Gilda*
Gilda: Okay, lets get it started then...
Rainbowdash: Get ready, This is you're is your chance to prove that youre actually a decent racer Gilda.
Sonic: Alright lets go Shadow!
Shadow: Let me show my real power!
Thats how i felt it should have gone more or less...
Lets talk about the race itself...
Now because the whole point of this chapter was a race, i expected nothing more than, well... A race... This i found to be boring to because it was just a race. But this is just my personal taste. Im going to give a little scenario on how i think it should have gone. While they were racing Team Shadow should have pulled out a dirty trick like throwing a chaos spear at them. That would have turned it into an epic race FIGHT! Then Sonic and Rainbowdash would have started fighting back. Their main goal would have been to race to the finish, but i think it would have made it alot like the shadow boss fights from Generations and SA2. But By the end of the race, They dont actually finish the race, And Team Shadow just ends up getting K.O.'d before they actually finish racing. And although i've made it clear that i hate an abundance of combo moves, especially back in the earlier parts of the story, it would have actually been cool to see such a large variety... This time. There were a few combo moves used, but practically all of them were only used to increase their teams speed, which is sad. And despite all of those people that may dissagree with me on how i just see this story as a whole, im sure im not the only one who would have loved to picture Team Sonic And Shadow fighting against each other with all kinds of bad-ass combos. This is my interpretation of how it should go...
Shadow: Chaos Spear
A quick flash of light is hurled from shadows hands toward team Sonic who manages to dodge it successfully.
Rainbowdash: Hey thats cheating!
Gilda: We never set ground rules Dash.
Shadow: you're emerald is as good as ours!
Sonic: Kinda shows how desperate you are if you wanna pull out dirty tricks like that Shadow... Alright! PUT EM UP!
Team Sonic and Shadow give an intense lunge at each other. Rainbowdash and Gilda Zeroing in on each other like missles. While Sonic and Shadow charge full speed at each other, not ready to comprimise their direction...
I think that would have been some kick-ass potentail ideas there, but it was just over simplified when it came to the story, which is kind of tragic.
Final Verdict...
This chapter looked like it could been so fucking EPIC! As a matter of fact most of the material in this story has good potential value, but alot of these chapters feel like there alot missing from it, like they're rushed. Most of the chapters here feel like they are just a few days away from being some Awsome and blood pumping action scenes. a good example would be in one of the prevoius chapters where Robotnik assaults the castle in Canterlot or something, it could have just been a bit more well written and coreographed ir acted out a bit better, that could have made a great scene . But for what ever reason, the writer just keeps releasing them before they're barely finished, and can be enjoyed as much as they possibly could be.
I know you may not care for my approval or anything, and advice from me is probably the last thing you wanna hear, but i reccomend just giving the chapters a quick scan over and see what kind of awesome shit you can turn it into.
This is might just be me in my own hype, but i would like to think that those ideas i came up with earlier are pretty good ideas. And im sugguesting that maybe whenever it feels appropriate, you try to turn those dullish "intense" moments into something cool or awsome.
I hope you found my critisizm helpfull, and uf you didn't sorry i wasted your time. Toodles
not that you mention it
i should have added that in the story
it didn't came to my mind till you told me
since you gave crituque i guess i can hire you as an assistant
care to join?
Wasn't he the one using Eggman to destroy the planet in SA2?
I forgot